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Shadow Lord

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Registration date : 2008-10-21

PostSubject: Untitled   Wed Nov 19, 2008 10:48 am

A light shines from a smiling face
The look that I see in her eyes is joy
My heart raecs as our eyes meet
Warmth fills my soul
This feeling is strange yet interesting
It urges me to seek it further
what is this
It seems like the demons are gone
All that remains is an Angel

Three friends go into battle
One is captured,
One flies away,
the one that is left becomes a hero.
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Lord of Altair

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Registration date : 2008-10-22

PostSubject: Re: Untitled   Wed Nov 19, 2008 8:00 pm

A nice feeling, but for the sake of not having an admin look like a kindergartener, please spell check and use the space bar at the right times. :roll:

Life's a road with many turns,
to make it through you first get burns,
cuts and scratches, thrusts of steel,
but through the pains true life yo feel.
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Chaos Poet

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Location : Hell
Registration date : 2008-10-21

PostSubject: Re: Untitled   Thu Nov 20, 2008 7:00 pm

I fixed your errors, but I'm not doing it forever.

Anyways, good posts, as I am replying to all three in this forum you added. But the lack of rhyme scheme is getting uninteresting, spice it up a bit!

Let the fire consume you.
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PostSubject: Re: Untitled   Wed Jul 08, 2009 3:05 pm

The ideas here are disjointed, various but without much relevance to each other. Focus on a few key feelings and discard what is unnecessary.
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