Number of posts : 5 Location : some place not home Registration date : 2008-10-23
Subject: War Fri Nov 28, 2008 12:40 am
A war here A war there There always gonna be They've been since the beginning They'll be to the end We'll kill and be hurt and then healed We'll kill again but this time we won't mend It leaves chaos where its been It brings destruction where it goes Just wait and see There is yet many battles to be
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Chaos Poet Chaos Lord
Number of posts : 193 Location : Hell Registration date : 2008-10-21
Subject: Re: War Fri Nov 28, 2008 10:55 am
I can see your work improvving, but the flow still isn't there. You've got the message and the knack, but you just need a little experience. I look forward to reading more of your work, because this one I like for its message and tone.