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Registration date : 2008-10-23

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PostSubject: War   War Icon_minitimeFri Nov 28, 2008 12:40 am

A war here
A war there
There always gonna be
They've been since the beginning
They'll be to the end
We'll kill and be hurt and then healed
We'll kill again but this time we won't mend
It leaves chaos where its been
It brings destruction where it goes
Just wait and see
There is yet many battles to be


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Registration date : 2008-10-21

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PostSubject: Re: War   War Icon_minitimeFri Nov 28, 2008 10:55 am

I can see your work improvving, but the flow still isn't there. You've got the message and the knack, but you just need a little experience. I look forward to reading more of your work, because this one I like for its message and tone.
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