Number of posts : 65 Location : At a perfect state of peace Registration date : 2008-10-21
Subject: Untitled Wed Nov 19, 2008 10:48 am
A light shines from a smiling face The look that I see in her eyes is joy My heart raecs as our eyes meet Warmth fills my soul This feeling is strange yet interesting It urges me to seek it further what is this It seems like the demons are gone All that remains is an Angel
Faust Lord of Altair
Number of posts : 107 Age : 31 Location : The Nondemension Registration date : 2008-10-22
Subject: Re: Untitled Wed Nov 19, 2008 8:00 pm
A nice feeling, but for the sake of not having an admin look like a kindergartener, please spell check and use the space bar at the right times. :roll:
Chaos Poet Chaos Lord
Number of posts : 193 Location : Hell Registration date : 2008-10-21
Subject: Re: Untitled Thu Nov 20, 2008 7:00 pm
I fixed your errors, but I'm not doing it forever.
Anyways, good posts, as I am replying to all three in this forum you added. But the lack of rhyme scheme is getting uninteresting, spice it up a bit!
Jammerjoint New Poet
Number of posts : 6 Registration date : 2009-07-08
Subject: Re: Untitled Wed Jul 08, 2009 3:05 pm
The ideas here are disjointed, various but without much relevance to each other. Focus on a few key feelings and discard what is unnecessary.
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